This video was supposed to have a flow-chart explanation, but it did not copy over. Look on D2L under Unit 4 and look at the Synthesis assignment. Find one piece of evidence you have for your argument for each claim that you wish to share with the class and put that up for your peers here.
Make whatever evidence you have relevant to your claim through the analysis.
Now, create your own sort of flow-chart for your essay, or an outline of sorts. Imagine the the objections are me asking: "explain this quote/summary/paraphrase," or, "show me how this information strengthens your overall thesis." You might set yours up like this:
Claim #1 (should be the problem):
Reason/Evidence for #1:
Analysis of reason/evidence for #1:
Claim #2 (should be the cause):
Reason/Evidence for #2:
Analysis of reason/evidence for #2:
Claim #3 (should be the solution):
Reason/Evidence for #3:
Analysis of reason/evidence for #3:
Your job, and the job of your peers, is to raise their own objections to your reason/evidence and analysis. This is a good way to crowd source for your paper. Your paper, the blog, and the synthesis assignment are all to help you write your paper, and the claims should be from your thesis.
Claim #1: Bullying of LGBT teens in schools is at astronomical levels.
ReplyDeleteReason/Evidence #1: LGBT teens are 3 times more likely to have a physical altercation, 3 times more likely to be threatened or injured with a weapon at school, and 4 times more likely to skip school due to safety concerns (Swearer, Turner, Givens, Pollack, 2).
Analysis #1: LGBT teens receive a drastically increased amount of harassment and bullying.
Claim #2: Lack of understanding within teenagers results in targeting of LGBT teens.
Reason/Evidence #2: 5-6% of teens identify as LGBT (Swearer, Turner, Givens, Pollack, 2).
Analysis #2: With a very small population, many students with have little to no interaction on a regular basis with the LGBT group, resulting in no development of understanding nor acceptance, and the group being branded as outside of the norm.
Claim #3: Offering or requiring a Sociology class within high schools can help to build understanding of diversity outside of the accepted norm.
Reason/Evidence #3: The very small LGBT population is not large enough to regularly interact with enough of the population to develop understanding.
Analysis #3: Through a Sociology class, a greater understanding of all students, especially those who are not in the majority, can be gained and help result in less bullying due to differences, primarily LGBT.
Works Cited
Swearer, Susan; Turner, Rhonda; Givens, Jamie; Pollack, William. ""You're So Gay!": Do Different Fortns of Bullying Matter
for Adolescent Males?" School Psychology Review,
2008, Volume 37, No. 2, pp. 160-173
Claim #1 (should be the problem): Failure of the No Child Left Behind (NCLB) Act due to lack of revision and teachers teaching to standardized testing curriculum.
ReplyDeleteReason/Evidence for #1:"Of those who say they are very familiar with the law, 28% it has made education better and 48% say worse."(Huff Post)
Analysis of reason/evidence for #1:Due to the majority population saying the NCLB Act has made education worse, supports the claim that the NCLB Act has failed.
Claim #2 (should be the cause):Teachers and school's losing focus on teaching curriculum, but instead, focusing on teaching to standardized testing.
Reason/Evidence for #2:"Teachers and parents charge that NCLB encourages, and rewards teaching children to score well on the test, rather than teaching with a primary goal of learning. As a result, teachers are pressured to teach a narrow set of test-taking skills and a test-limited range of knowledge."(Deborah White)
Analysis of reason/evidence for #2:With refocusing rewards systems for teachers and schools, teachers can once again focus on educating students versus trying to get more money for the school.
Claim #3 (should be the solution):By revising/updating the current NCLB Act, teachers and schools can once again focus on teaching children a wide range of knowledge/education needed to be successful in society.
Reason/Evidence for #3:"The results from this (Gallup Poll) survey are in line with January (2012) Gallup Poll, which found that Americans tend to favor either eliminating the law or keeping it with heavy revisions."(Huff Post)
Analysis of reason/evidence for #3:Through the revision on the NCLB Act, teachers can focus on teaching for education versus for standardized testing.
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ReplyDeleteClaim #1 The developmentally disabled are often victims of hate crimes.
ReplyDeleteevidence 1-The National Police Research Unit at Flinders University found that people who have an intellectual disability are 10 times more likely to be victimized than non-disabled people(llewelyn-scorey, 1998)
evidence 2-in a Mencap published report, with replies of more than 900 people with learning disabilites, two-thirds of respondents said they had been bullied more than once a month, and almost one-third stated they had been bullied on a daily or weekly basis. (Learning disability practice, July 2010, vol 6 page 17)
Analysis:According to studies, the developmentally disabled are at much greater risk of being victimized by a hate crime.
Claim #2 Often, hate crimes against the developmentally disable are not prosecuted because the victims are not able to articulate well enough to explain the crime or the criminal and because they do not have the resources available to make a report.
evidence 1-In interviews of victims, the interviewers used heavily focused questions which are more likely to elicit inaccurate information (Journal of Intellectual Disability Research volume 52 part1 pp 49-58)
evidence 2-Because police have some responsibility and discretion to determine what cases have a chance of successful prosecution, they hesitate to pursue allegations when the victim or witness is a person with an intellectual disability.
Claim #3 Changes in the reporting process and in the ways investigators interview victims will greatly increase the conviction rate for hate crimes against the developmentally disabled
Evidence 1-It is important to develop a system that enables appropriate responses for victims when hate crimes occur.
evidence 2-The victims were able to provide more information when asked more open ended questions
analysis: Those investigating hate crimes of the developmentally disabled require special training in order to effectively interview the victims and witness.
Claim #1 (should be the problem): The negative environmental effects that comes from fracking and the the pollution to our water system.
ReplyDeleteReason/Evidence for #1:”That groundwater contamination from fracking doesn’t necessarily happen overnight—we may continue to see contamination problems from fracking in the years, decades and centuries to come. “ - ecowatch
Analysis of reason/evidence for #1:Due to the overwhelming evidence that fracking procedures pollute fresh water supply the government has still not passed new legislation.
Claim #2 (should be the cause):Under regulation of fracking procedures and the fracking industry as a whole has led to pollution and contamination.
Reason/Evidence for #2:”Fracking is inherently unsafe and we cannot rely on regulation to protect communities’ water, air and public health.” foodandwaterwatch.org
Analysis of reason/evidence for #2:With the regulations that are in place today fracking will continue to be a environmental hazard, and only when strict regulations and more testing is done will fracking become a safe alternative fuel.
Claim #3 (should be the solution):By turning to alternative fuel sources, like solar power, we can harness energy without damaging the environment.
Reason/Evidence for #3:”The performance of a solar cell is measured in terms of its efficiency at turning sunlight into electricity.” renewableenergyworld.com
Analysis of reason/evidence for #3: As solar panel and PV panel technology becomes more feasible solar energy will become a more viable option for an alternative energy source.
Claim #1: Bullying campaigns are aimed to children and teens
ReplyDeleteReason/ Evidence #1: stopbullying.gov
Analysis #1: The most popular site that are research for bullying are teen/ children oriented. Most just guid through what teens/ children go through.
Claim #2: Adult bullying is categorized with different language
Reason/ Evidence #2: One in six adults suffers some form of workplace bullying (CBS New York).
Analysis #2: Since adult bullying is not often talked about people often ignore the problem that they might actually be one of those people that are being attacked. Being that most attacks of adult bullying is happening during working hours vs. at schools, adults choose to brush off a rude comment, ignore a mean stair of even disregard a physical attack.
Claim #3: Campaigns should acknowledge adult bullying and include testimonials and situations to bring forth that it exists and not lessen adult bullying by categorizing in behind the scene language.
Reason/ Evidence #3: language used is harassment, assault
Analysis #3: By exposing more that adults can also be victim of bullying and creating more sites that aim towards adults, adult bullying might not be so hidden and people could seek help from whatever source they could find, their human resources department, online, blogs, videos, real situations.
Claim #1: Americans negative attitude towards manic bipolar disorder
ReplyDeleteReason/Evidence for #1: In 1999 a poll of 1008 people were surveyed and 44 percent believe people with manic depression are often violent
Analysis of reason/evidence for #1: Americans view people with manic bipolar disorder are violent
Claim #2: misunderstanding the manic bipolar disorder
Reason/Evidence for #2: In 1999 a poll of 1008 people were surveyed and 25 percent think people who have mood disorders, or who have manic-depressive illness, are very different than others
Analysis of reason/evidence for #2: Americans negative attitude towards people with manic bipolar disorder is caused by their misunderstanding of the disorder.
Claim #3: Teach people about the disorder and learn to deal with it
Reason/Evidence for #3: "We must recognize manic depression is a medical illness, not a character weakness," says Lydia Lewis, Executive Director, National DMDA. "Also, we need to make people realize it is a potentially fatal illness. In fact, if left untreated or mistreated, more than 15 percent of those afflicted will take their lives."
Analysis of reason/evidence for #3: people should learn that manic bipolar is not a personality, but a medical illness and try to help other with the disorder to get help.
Work cited
NamiNewsroom;http://www.nami.org/Template.cfm?Section=Press_Release_Archive&template=/contentmanagement/contentdisplay.cfm&ContentID=5709&title=Gaps+Exist+In+Public
Claim #1 : Religion has too much influence within the United States government.
ReplyDeleteReason/Evidence for #1: There have been numerous discriminatory laws based on religious beliefs. Some of these current and previous laws restricted women's right to vote, forbid mix race couples to marry,allowed states to make laws that excluded African American's from voting, and forbid gay couples to marry.
Analysis of reason/evidence for #1:Religion has historically played a large role in our government, some of the laws based on these beliefs have lead to the support of discrimination and racism, and do not reflect the nation as a whole.
Claim #2:Religious beliefs that highly influence the government lead to a more divided and controversial society.
Reason/Evidence for #2:Imposing a law on other people that is based on one particular belief (which is not the same as theirs) is a violation of freedom of religion, and does more to tear apart our nation rather than bring it closer together.
Analysis of reason/evidence for #2:Religious based laws that violate our own constitution are harmful.
Claim #3: Get away from the idea that religion must play a role in establishing future laws, and when revising the current ones we already have.
Reason/Evidence for #3: Our constitution expressly forbids the government from endorsing or establishing any religion.
Analysis of reason/evidence for #3: Protection from religion is just as important as protection of religion.